Please help me editing this statement of purpose(attached file) including structure, grammar, language, and etc. It is better if you can add more details regarding the program
I’m applying for two programs:
The school requirement is that:
The personal statement should describe succinctly your reasons for applying to the proposed program at the Viterbi School of Engineering, your preparation for this field of study, study interests, future career plans, and other aspects of your background and interests which may aid the admissions committee in evaluating your aptitude and motivation for graduate study.
my detail information is:
LabView | OrCAD | Powerful user of Excel | PuTTy | C | Cadence | P Spice | Mathematica | Matlab | SolidWords PCB | Arduino
Product Model Engineer, 06/2016 to 09/2016
Shenzhen Ganwei Software Technology Co., Ltd. â€“ Shenzhen, China
â€¢Produced ad hoc reports and documents for senior team members.
â€¢Created and built firmware to test alarm.
â€¢Verified data integrity and accuracy.
Assistant Engineer, 06/2018 to 09/2018
Shenzhen Huada Limited By Share Ltd â€“ Shenzhen, China
â€¢Adjust and assemble antenna and control board.
â€¢Created and built firmware to test security walk through metal detector.
â€¢Verified stream data integrity and accuracy.
â€¢Assemble the integrated control box.
â€¢Co-designed and test power distribution requirements for the construction of high tech manufacturing
â€¢Performed in-depth electrical acceptance testing of completed hardware, including continuity and high potential
â€¢Troubleshot and debug electrical equipment including antenna, temperature sensors, infrared ray sensor, cooler.
â€¢Monitored installation and operations to consistently meet rigorous customer requirements.
â€¢Created signal generator and firmware to test hardware.
â€¢Managed engineering changes using SAP systems.
â€¢Responsible for site safety and coordination